River Queen

River Queen
River Queen (2005)

IMDB rating: 6.30

Plot: An intimate story set during the 1860s in which a young Irish woman Sarah (Samantha Morton) and her family find themselves on both sides of the turbulent wars between British and Maori during the British colonisation of New Zealand.

Directors: Ward Vincent

Actors: Sutherland Kiefer,Curtis Cliff,Morrison Temuera,Lesser Anton,Paratene Rawiri,Rea Stephen,Kaa Wi Kuki,Ruka Mark,Reweti Tyson,Putu Grayson,Passfield Nathan,Lakshman Brandon,Action,Adventure,Drama,

Is Tony Blair's evidence on Jan. 29 a big deal in London, England? 10 points for best answer?
THANKS to those in the U.K. who may answer / post here –

This is how the NY TIMES is covering the Blair testimony :

Almost seven years after he ordered British troops to join the American-led invasion of Iraq, former Prime Minister Tony Blair offered a passionate defense of his actions on Friday, saying he would take the same steps again to counter what he depicted as a threat from Saddam Hussein that had assumed far greater dimensions after the attacks of Sept. 11, 2001.

At times spirited and at times tetchy, Mr. Blair was speaking at an official inquiry into Britian

Fish Called Wanda, A

Fish Called Wanda, A
Fish Called Wanda, A (1988)

IMDB rating: 7.70

Plot: Sexy American diamonds lover Wanda and her boyfriend Otto are in England to plot alongside George and Ken the robbery of a diamond collection. Wanda and Otto want the stolen diamonds for themselves, and inform the police about George not knowing that he has already moved the diamonds to another secret place. Wanda thinks the best way to find out is by getting close to George’s lawyer – Archie Leach.

download Fish Called Wanda, A

Directors: Crichton Charles

Actors: Cleese John,Palin Michael,Kline Kevin,Georgeson Tom,Palmer Geoffrey,Elwes Mark,Phillips Neville,Jonfield Peter,Campbell Ken,Ashton Al,Hume Roger,Comedy,Crime,

John Cleese on 40 years of ‘Monty Python,’ ‘Fawlty Towers,’ and sex!
14.10.09
Was first broadcast in the U.K. How do we know this? Well, partly because Python member John Cleese is so unbelievably decrepit. “I’m old and incontinent!” laughs the comedian. The Python crew’s 40th anniversary is also being marked by a series of events. Tonight the five surviving members (Cleese, Terry Jones, Eric Idle, Michael Palin, and Terry Gilliam) will reunite for an appearance on Late Night with Jimmy Fallon . Tomorrow they will grace (and possibly silly walk across) the stage of New York’s Ziegfeld Theater where they will be given a special award from The British Academy of Film and Television Arts. “I think they’re giving it to us out of embarrassment for the fact that they never gave us one when we were doing the shows, which is quite funny,” says Cleese.

And there’s more silliness! IFC will broadcast the debut show in a six-part Python documentary called

Life of Brian

Life of Brian
Life of Brian (1979)

IMDB rating: 8.20

Plot: The Monty Pyton team tells the life, death and resurrection (?) of Brian from Nazareth, an unwilling prophet who wants to free his land from the oppression of Rome. When Brian covers a huge wall with the writing “ROMANI ITE DOMUM” (Romans go home), a local revolutionary group begins to take him seriously…

Directors: Jones Terry

Actors: Chapman Graham,Cleese John,Gilliam Terry,Idle Eric,Jones Terry,Palin Michael,Bayler Terence,Colley Kenneth,Innes Neil,McKeown Charles,Young John,Brett Peter,Comedy,

Spiritually speaking, does anyone on here like Monty Python?
If so, what is your favourite sketch or movie by them?

My favourite sketchs:
Philosophy Football
The Spanish Inquisition
Silly Job Interview
Exploding Penguin
Nudge, Nudge
Historical Impersonations
…Those are just a few from the Flying Circus.

As for movies, my favourite have to be The Life of Brian and Monty Python and the Holy Grail.
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I quite like Monty Python. :)
Asquared | Jan 29, 2010


Philosoraptor would like to know if you had a real question.
Philosoraptor | Jan 29, 2010


And now for something completely different
Alex B. Welcome to the machine | Jan 29, 2010


Blessed are the cheese makers.
Lenin rulz #1 | Jan 29, 2010


Twit Race
Parrot Sketch
Hiding Skills
Kaz | Jan 29, 2010


Oh, yes.
The Doctor | Jan 29, 2010


The only thing I’ve every seen that they’ve done that was funny was the Holy Grail. Flying Circus is so not funny that it makes me want to cry.
Spyro, Destroyer of Sheep | Jan 29, 2010


Sadly. Micheal isn’tthe funniest Palin anymore..
Marc P | Jan 29, 2010


I like Monty Python, used to to watch it on BBC all the time when I lived with an english guy.
CATheist | Jan 29, 2010


This is a dead parrot!

I love it
No Chance Without Jesus | Jan 29, 2010


Nudge nudge, say no more
the dead parrot
spanish inquisition
ministry of silly walks
argument clinic
Dani | Jan 29, 2010


i love the Pythons
and my hobbies outside of summarizing Proust are strangling small animals, golf and masturbation,
Staggerlee2ElectricBoogaloo | Jan 29, 2010


I like it too. I actually own a few DVDs.
Michael K | Jan 29, 2010


What have the Romans ever done for us?
Son of a PropReno | Jan 29, 2010


World’s Funniest Joke

But I love Life of Brian.

"Fwow him to the gwound centurian!"

"Roughly Sir?"

"Yes, Vewy Woughlwy!"
Sean | Jan 29, 2010


Favorite movie is Life of Brian. Favorite quote from any of them is..

"I object to all the sex on the television. I mean, I keep falling off!"
Martin (atheist) | Jan 29, 2010


Sir Bedevere: What makes you think she’s a witch?
Peasant 3: Well, she turned me into a newt!
Sir Bedevere: A newt?
Peasant 3: [meekly after a long pause] … I got better.
Crowd: [shouts] Burn her anyway!

And don’t forget. Always look on the bright side of life!
Leo | Jan 29, 2010

War of the Satellites

War of the Satellites
War of the Satellites (1958)

IMDB rating: 4.10

Plot: An “unknown force” declares war against planet Earth when the United Nations disobeys warnings to cease and desist in its attempts at assembling the first satellite in the atmosphere.

i get this movie here online War of the Satellites and download

Directors: Corman Roger

Actors: Devon Richard,Miller Dick,Fox Michael,Shayne Robert,Barclay Jered,Sinclair Eric,VeSota Bruno,Sayer Jay,Gordon Roy,Corman Roger,Brinkley John,Dickerson Beach,Sci-Fi,

Do you think Haiti is going to illustrate the following start difference between democrats and republicans?
Liberals don’t really know how to build anything, they can only comprehend giving things away that are soon used up.

When we invaded Afghanistan and Iraq, we brought with us republican leadership.

We won both wars within weeks and took control of the entire population.
We immediately began building schools, hospitals and infrastructure.
We brought power, phone lines and satellite dishes where they had never existed in history.
We then created two societies that began functioning economically on their own.

And we gave them total freedom, even from us and backed away as they elected their own leaders, some of whom were hostile to us.

Obama, on the other hand, the moment he was in office began trying to take freedom away in other nations, by supporting an attempted dictatorship in Honduras and with malicious accusations of voter fraud in Afghanistan.

Isn’t the world better off with republicans in charge?


we won the war in weeks?

lol

and are you saying there were no accusations of voter fraud in Iraq or Afghanistan under Bush? lol?

did Obama stop the building of schools in Afghanistan/Iraq? lol?

and didn’t obama have construction as a major part of the stimulus? lol?

Fox News is failing you my friend…

g | Jan 14, 2010


Sigh.
Hey now | Jan 14, 2010


You are waging a constant war with reality aren’t you?
Edna | Jan 14, 2010


Start difference?
brown9500v15 | Jan 14, 2010


The stuff you’re smoking is bad, dude.
I Have a Dream | Jan 14, 2010


Yes, your observation is very acute and right on the money.
Anthony | Jan 14, 2010


What an interesting revisionist history you have of the wars in Iraq and Afghanistan. You might be interested in a frontline documentary called Bush’s War if you want the real story on our invasion in Iraq:
http://www.pbs.org/wgbh/pages/frontline/ bushswar/

Actually, what am I saying. You wouldn’t be interested since it would create cognitive dissonance as to your perception of Republican leadership.

And btw, this isn’t an invasion, we are sending disaster relief to a tragically devastated country. This is no different than when Bush sent aid after the Tsunami.
Ghost of Tom Joad | Jan 14, 2010


Allow me to retort!:
We won both wars within weeks and took control of the entire population.

> Wrong, Iraq a total boondoggle after the military collapsed, we had no were near the amount of troops needed to provide security. Security only happened after the surge combined with paying off the Shites not to annihilate Sunnis

We immediately began building schools, hospitals and infrastructure.
> Which most of the funds have been squandered by the corrupt Afghan government, many of the school stand empty or have been destroyed by the taliban.

We brought power, phone lines and satellite dishes where they had never existed in history.
> Wrong again, a good percentage of Iraq had modern infrastructure (whatever was not destroyed by the US in two wars) Most of Afghanistan is no better (if not worse) than it was 20 years ago.

We then created two societies that began functioning economically on their own.
>Iraq only functions because of oil revenues, of that security is still primarily the result of a US present for 7 years now. And you call Afghanistan a functioning government? haa ha

Truth is Bush screwed up Afghanistan big time when he pulled troops and money to fight his little personal grudge match with Saddam.
Doug | Jan 14, 2010


Do you have any sense of decency? What is wrong with you? You are trying to score political points off of this horrible human suffering. this is not a political issue. This is something we should all pull together on. We are all Americans.

I’ll hold my tongue for now on how "Republican leadership" worked in Iraq’s water, power, and phone utilities, construction projects, and accounting of money spent.
The Woodpecker! | Jan 14, 2010


These are your claims;
"We won both wars within weeks and took control of the entire population.
We immediately began building schools, hospitals and infrastructure.
We brought power, phone lines and satellite dishes where they had never existed in history.
We then created two societies that began functioning economically on their own."

First, We did not win both wars in weeks, Iraq or Afghanistan, in fact, neither one is over and we have won nothing.
Next, regarding the rebuilding is another false claim,as Iraq is still for the most part without the utilities they had before our invasion and destruction of their infrastructure.
They are still trying to get by with part time delivery of water, sewer and electric.
Now, one of your biggest line of bullcrap, is the one about creating a self sufficient government,as we are constantly pouring money into both countries, money badly needed here at home.
I am by no means a liberal or democrat, but lies are lies by either party, so get the facts straight.
bojo8127 | Jan 14, 2010


Duh! There’s no OIL there!

Obama did not take away freedom in Honduras – what a load of crap. He spoke out against a fascist military takeover from a Democratically elected President. Republicans seem quite happy about it though – they’re used to dealing with South American military dictatorships like Reagan’s buddies he sold us out to.
And Obama had something to do with Afganistan election fraud? Do you guys ever listen to yourselves?
future | Jan 14, 2010

Off Limits

Off Limits
Off Limits (1988)

IMDB rating: 5.90

Plot: McGriff and Albaby are probably doing the worst law enforcement job in the world – they are plain clothes U.S. military policemen on duty in war-time Saigon. However, their job becomes even harder when they start investigating the serial killings of local prostitutes. Their prime suspect is high ranking U.S. Army officer which brings their lives in danger.

Directors: Crowe Christopher

Actors: Dafoe Willem,Hines Gregory,Ward Fred,Lim Kay Tong,Glenn Scott,Grier David Alan,David Keith,O’Connor Raymond,Brooks Richard,Reed Richard Lee,Brown Woody,Siu Ken,Action,Thriller,War,Drama,

How do I break lease because of noisy neighbors?
Your Question
How to break lease because of noisy neighbors?
So I moved into this apartment with my BF in december. When we interviewed with the landlord she told us flat out that this was a quiet building and if we were party guys then we best look somewhere else. Since moving in I may of gotten 4 nights of full sleep. My neighbors upstairs are constantly stomping around. I know that in an apartment noise is just part of it. Things get dropped, cupboards may get slammed, I get that. But this guy and his wife are ridiculously loud. From 7am to 12 at night I can hear them moving from room to room and most often, the couch to the refrigerator. I’ve mentioned this to my landlord twice now. Each time she goes on to say that it’s an old building and it can’t be helped. Well the guy below me hasn’t heard me once since I moved in. I don’t tip toe, I don’t shuffle. I just don’t stomp.
I’m at my limit. Not only must I hear them tromping around, but late at night his snoring wakes me. The sliding glass door is always opening and banging closed. I can hear him going to the bathroom. I can hear them having sex. This is NOT a quiet building. I feel lied too. If I had known any of this I wouldn’t of signed anything. She had gone up to speak with them after the first complaint. After the second she told us that she had asked them to walk for her! Can you believe that? As if they would walk how they normally do while she’s watching! But I’m stuck here till december. Truly, if anyone knows anything to help please do tell. I cannot afford to break a lease and pay for it and there is no way in hell I’m giving the landlord anymore money. The other night there was a stampede upstairs and I had knocked on the ceiling to let them know that it was a bit much. You know what they did? Stomped back at me like children!
Just last week the handle for the toilet broke off inside the tank. When I opened it the whole thing was crumbled into rust fragments. It was sickening. When I told her about it she got huffy, as if it was my fault and an inconvenience for her to deal with. I’m losing sleep. I’m stressing out. Its hurting my relationship and my job. Anyone, Please help.
PS. I live in victoria BC, Canada


tell the land lord
meanddave | Feb 06, 2010


call the police every time they are making too much noise. inform the landlord in writing every time you have to call the police. I would do it every night if needed and then drop off a letter to her every morning saying your sleep was disturbed because of noise and that you had to call the police. then threaten to go to the building owner and tell the owner that the police are being called to the property every nite which gives the place a bad rep. keep on with the police and letters every day and in every letter ask to be let out of your lease.
nursek | Feb 06, 2010


Try ear plugs and a white noise machine or music. If you break lease, you’ll likely be responsible for the rent until someone else moves in. I know it sucks to not get a good night’s sleep, but weird noises are part of apartment living.
sassy sarah | Feb 06, 2010

Parent Trap, The

Parent Trap, The
Parent Trap, The (1998)

IMDB rating: 6.20

Plot: What if you spent your whole life wishing for something you didn’t know you already had? Hallie Parker and Annie James are about to find out. Hallie is a cool girl from California. Annie is a fair rose from London. When the two accidentally meet at summer camp, they think they have nothing in common except…they’re identical twins! Now they’re up to their freckles in schemes and dreams to switch places, get their parents back together and have the family they’ve always wished for!

buy Parent Trap, The and instant download

Directors: Meyers Nancy

Actors: Quaid Dennis,Kunz Simon,Stevens Ronnie,Comedy,Family,Romance

i need help…please..?
i have a 14 year old gf that is preg and both her parents are complete scum. they call her all kinds of names and threaten to punch her in the stomach and this and that..and i used to love her…but she is a complete lie..i keep cathing her in lies..and i feel trapt…and just recently..one of my life long friends witnessed her kiss an old man (54 years old) and i had her for 2 and a half hours try to convince me that im wrong and that she didnt do anything..and then she immediatly calls the friend that witnessed her do it..not knowing im sitting rite there..she says "omg why did u tell him i did that i told u not to tell him"..and then i find out she also had sex with a 37 year old man..its so ******* up..and an hour after i find all this out…i catch alot of my friends lying to me saying they are my friends..but they reveal all my secterts to anyone thats around…i trusted my life with these people..i feel like killing myself..help..


eww ?
Garrett | Feb 07, 2010


Separate your life from these people.. You shouldn’t have that in your life. And please, just don’t kill you self. Think about what it would do to the people you care about . I had a friend who did and it was tough so don’t do anything rash – talk to someone.
Aly | Feb 07, 2010


Honestly, I don’t know what to tell you other than that is a terrible situation and I’m sorry. Are you sure she’s telling the truth about the pregnancy? Second, it sounds like she’s been abused. She needs to get out of there. Is there someone at school you can talk to? Sorry I can’t be of any help. I wish you the best though…
Nips | Feb 07, 2010


There’s a possibility that it’s not even your child. Just try to calm down. Everything will get better. You just feel really bad at the moment. Just think about it, you don’t need any of those people. You should try to find better friends because you can’t trust them or anything.
Liz | Feb 07, 2010

Constantine

Constantine
Constantine (2005)

IMDB rating: 6.50

Plot: The story of irreverent supernatural detective John Constantine, who has literally been to Hell and back. When Constantine teams up with skeptical policewoman Angela Dodson to solve the mysterious suicide of her twin sister, their investigation takes them through the world of demons and angels that exists just beneath the landscape of contemporary Los Angeles. Caught in a catastrophic series of otherworldly events, the two become inextricably involved and seek to find their own peace at whatever cost.

Directors: Lawrence Francis

Actors: Reeves Keanu,Hounsou Djimon,Baker Max,LaBeouf Shia,Vince Pruitt Taylor,Rossdale Gavin,Stormare Peter,Ramirez Jesse,Zuniga Jose,Guinan Francis,Cedar Larry,Fantasy,Horror,Thriller,Drama,Action,

Calling all history buffs!..?
I know people don’t like it when you ask for homework help on here but i’m desperate! I’m just so confused with all of these events, that any help would be soo beneficial. I’m trying to organize these events in order of occurence. (Oh and ps, this isn’t actually a homework assignment but rather a way to help me understand my world civilizations class better..because right now when we have class discussions, i’m SO confused! Any help is appreciated:

1. "Eternal City" of Rome sacked by Atilla the Hun

2. Byzantine empire defeated by Turks

3. Christianity proclaimed official religion of Eastern Empire

4. Justinian constructs church at Hagia Sophia

5. Constantine renames Byzantium, Constantinople

6. Council of Nicaea condemns Arian Christianity

7. Franks converted to Orthodox Christianity

8. Germanic kingdoms: Ostogoths, Franks, Bergundians, Visigoths, Vandals control Western Europe

9. Heraclius begins reign, focuses empire in East

10. Islamic armies defeated and Asia minor retained by Byzantines

11. Islamic armies overrun empire

12. Justinian codifies Roman Law in Corpus Juris Civilis

13. Lombards invade Italy

14. Nika riots in Constantinople

15. Odovacer defeats Romulus Augustus

16. Theodora raises an army that kills 35,000 in a single day

Wedding Crashers

Wedding Crashers
Wedding Crashers (2005)

IMDB rating: 7.20

Plot: Divorce mediators John Beckwith and Jeremy Grey are business partners and lifelong friends who share one truly unique springtime hobby—crashing weddings! Whatever the ethnicity of the wedding party—Jewish, Italian, Irish, Chinese, Hindu—the charismatic and charming duo always have clever back stories for inquisitive guests and inevitably become the hit of every reception, where they strictly adhere to their proven rules of wedding crashing to meet and pick up women aroused by the very thought of marriage. At the tail end of another successful season of toasting brides and grooms, Jeremy learns that the daughter of Treasury Secretary William Cleary and his wife, Kathleen, is getting married in what is sure to be the Washington D.C. social event of the year. After infiltrating the lavish affair, John and Jeremy quickly set their sights on two bridesmaids, Claire and Gloria Cleary. With the lavish reception in full swing, Jeremy works his game plan to perfection in seducing Gloria, but John’s flirtation banter with Claire is unexpectedly impeded by her pompous, Ivy League boyfriend Sack. Having uncharacteristically fallen hard and fast for Claire, John convinces a resistant Jeremy to bend the crashing rules and accept an invitation to an extended weekend party at the Cleary family compound. Once at the palatial waterfront estate, John and Jeremy endure a multitude of comical mishaps at the hands of the dysfunctional members of the Cleary family, but also learn a few unexpected lessons about love and relationships.

Directors: Dobkin David

Actors: Wilson Owen,Vaughn Vince,Walken Christopher,O’Donnell Keir,Cooper Bradley,Canada Ron,Gibson Henry,Yoakam Dwight,Conrad David,Comedy,Romance,

what song do these lyris go to? "keep it comin on, keep it comin on. dont stop it now.."from wedding crashers?
the song is on wedding crahers when owen wilson and vnce vaughn start sleeping with all the women


"Keep it coming, Love." KC and the Sunshine Band from the 70’s.
Scunnered !!! | Feb 06, 2010


K.C. & The Sunshine Band – Keep it Coming Love?

Video:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0B2NUqBs3 TQ
Erin | Feb 06, 2010

Addams Family, The

Addams Family, The
Addams Family, The (1991)

IMDB rating: 6.50

Plot: The Addams step out of Charles Addams’ cartoons. They live with all of the trappings of the macabre (including a detached hand for a servant) and are quite wealthy. Added to this mix is a crooked accountant and his loan shark and a plot to slip in the shark’s son into the family as their long lost Uncle Fester. Can the false Fester find his way into the vault before he is discovered?

Directors: Sonnenfeld Barry

Actors: Hedaya Dan,Lloyd Christopher,Julia Raul,Struycken Carel,Benedict Paul,Hart Christopher,Workman Jimmy,Franklin John,Azito Tony,Martin Douglas Brian,Comedy,Fantasy,Horror,Family,

what horror movie is this?
What horror movie is this?
Okay its black and white. And its about a man marrying into a family of weirdos. The Grand Father is dying, and the inheritance is going to be given. So, his wife to be insists on him coming to meet everyone. He meets a relative that lives in the closet and hates men, a woman that looks like Morticia Addams, and a odd room that is like a torture chamber. Not to mention there is one song in the film he sings as he is losing his mind sort of. So yea

AND no its not the addams family…I have seen all of the old shows of that and new…thank you very much…


First tell me what language film is this…..?
If english certainly you can find it from some sites
alex | Feb 26, 2010


sorry i cant remember
Kat | Feb 26, 2010

The Tomb

The Tomb
The Tomb (2007)

IMDB rating: 1.60

Plot: A being known as “The Puppetmaster” holds victims captive in a tomb and tortures them.

Directors: Lommel Ulli

Actors: Behm Christian,Griesbaum Gerard,Barbour Michael,Smith Shawn,Shively Mathew,Garza Fabian,Comedy,Drama,

What do you think of this poem?
He had three sons and they, all three,
When called, for the encampment left;
So the poor father was bereft
Of rest and peace, for war, thought he.
Is hard – one has no time to feel
That one has ceased to be.

And many months went in and out,
And rife with tidings was the world:
No more were Turkish flags unfurled,
The Moslems had been put to rout,
For the unscarred Romanian lads
Full well had fought throughout.

The papers wrote that all the men
That had been called the spring before
Were due to quit the site of war;
So to the village came again
Now one, and now another yet
Of those who had left then.

But they were long in coming, they.
He wept – he thought how they would meet,
So at the gate or in the street
He scrutinized the roads all day,
And they came not. And fear was born
And lengthened the delay.

His ardent hope waned more and more
And ever bleaker grew his fear;
And though he questioned far and near,
All shrugged their shoulders as before;
At last, then, he went to the barracks
To learn what was in store.

The corporal met him. "Sir, my son.
My Radu, well – how does he fare ?"
He did for all his children care,
But Radu was the dearest one.
"He’s dead. In the first ranks, at Plevna
He fell. And well he’s done !"

Poor man… That Radu was in dust
He had long felt, and felt past cure;
But now, when he did know for sure,
He stood bewildered and nonplussed.
Dead Radu ? What ? The news exceeded
All human sense and trust.

Be curst, o, fiendish arm and man !
"And how is George ?" "Sir, I’m afraid
Under a cross he has been laid,
Breast-smitten by a yataghan."
"And my poor Mircea ?" "Mircea, too,
Died somewhere near Smirdan."

He said no word – dumb with the doom,
With forehead bent, like, on the cross,
A Christ, he looked, all at a loss
At the mute flooring of the room.
He seemed he saw in front of him
Three corpses in a tomb.

With feeble gait and dizzy eyes
He walks into the open air;
While groaning, stumbling on the stair,
He calls his boys by name and cries
And fumbling for some wall around
To stand upright he tries.

The blow he hardly can withstand;
He does not know if he is dead
Or still alive; he rests his head
Upon a bank of burning sand;
His long, emaciated face
He buries in his hand.

And so the man sat woe-begone.
It was midsummer and mid-day;
Yet soon the sun faded away
And lastly it was set and gone;
The human wreck would never budge;
He just stood on and on.

Past him, men, women walked care-free,
Cabs on the highroad rumbled by,
Past marched the soldiers with steps high,
And then, the moment he could see,
He pressed his temples with his fists:
"Three, mighty God, all three !";


i am going to be honest! i cried! written with such passion! the only change you might want to make is the length of your poem. you can do this because you are very talented. thank you!

justicejamie888 | Feb 03, 2010


meh
Shawn | Feb 03, 2010


This poem has possibilities but you have to make it shorter. Don’t go so much into details. When poetry tell a story it must only touch the subject lightly. The horror and grief will come through better by not clearly stating the facts. Facts are far to heavy for poetry.
Use the essentials of what you want to convey. Your style is good. Some verses are very beautiful but they are overrun by the lenght of the poem,they cannot stand out anymore.
I hope you will allow me to say this because you have the potential to make it a great poem. Just needs some more work. Good Luck.
Gino's mom | Feb 03, 2010